InconnectionwithyourapplicationforthepostofAssistantInformationOfficer,inviewoftheCivilServiceExaminationsUnit(CSEU)oftheCivilServiceBureauhasrecentlynotifiedtheresultstocandidateswhohavesatfortheCommonRecruitmentExamination(CRE)heldon16December2006,IshouldbegratefulifyoucouldfurnishusacopyofthenotificationletterbytheCSEUasaproofofyourattainingtherequisiteCRErequirementsforthepost這句英文有沒有錯？
這句英文的幾個文法錯誤，過去兩天談過，現在要說asaproofofyourattainingtherequirements。Proof（證明）作可數（countable）或不可數（uncountable）名詞都可以，所以asaproofofsomething或asproofofsomething文法都正確，意思是「以證明某事」，但asproofofsomething是較常用的說法。此外，要表示「已符合條件」，attainingtherequirements改為havingattainedtherequirements會好一點。
新聞處那句英文，共七十九字，實在太長，不看兩三遍，恐怕不能明白。句中談到的notificationletter，當然是指前文CSEU那封通告，其後再加issuedbytheCSEU四字，不但多餘，更令讀者以為是說另一封信。句子改短一點，反而會清楚一點：InconnectionwithyourapplicationforthepostofAssistantInformationOfficer,IunderstandthattheCivilServiceExaminationsUnitoftheCivilServiceBureauhasrecentlynotifiedcandidateswhosatforthe16December2006CommonRecruitmentExamination(CRE)oftheirresults.PleasesendusacopyofthenotificationasproofofyourhavingattainedtherequisiteCRErequirements。這裏兩句共用了六十四字，比原句少十五字。